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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Illustrate the meaning of "It's No Use Crying over Spilt Milk" (without using the actual phrase or literal exampl (02/07/08)

TITLE: The Promised Land
By pam Leitermann
02/13/08


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Everyday I wait to hear the sound of those

squeaky brakes that come from that truck

the one our town mail man drives.

Anticipation is an emotional addition

like an adrenalin rush you get when

you cross the finish line first!


My heart is pounding with excitement

I know because I can feel it in my throat.

That is how it feels everyday when I go

down my long black top, drive way,

to the finish line to the mail, box which

holds my future.


“Dum” “Da” “Dum” “Dum!” that’s the

sound that comes from my mind each time

I stretch out my arm to grab hold of the handle

on the door to the box, that holds my future.

As I reach in and pull out what might be my

ticket out of here, out of this crazy existence

the existence of my own thoughts!


I know this will be the day after all, I did

everything that was required of me. I wrote

with excitement! To keep the reader turning

each page with anticipation. I put all the

punctuations in the right places.

The description of all the characters were

explained thoroughly so the reader could

get a clear view in their mind of what each

one looked like.


Oh! Here goes that sound again; “Dum” “Da”

“Dum” “Dum!” Well the mail is in my hands

now I have to sort through it. A gas bill,

a phone bill and an insurance advertisement.

Oh! wait a minute there it is the one I

have been waiting for! I don’t know if

I can open it. All right already just calm

down it is only a letter, I am reassuring

myself again.


That “Dum” “Da” “Dum” sound seems to

grow louder everyday along with the

pounding in my heart and throat.

The drive way seems like its longer today too.

Well it is all about to come to an end.

That is what I felt like as I walked into

house and threw the mail on the kitchen

table. All accept of course the five by seven

manila envelope that was marked first class mail.

I held it with such a tight grip like it was going

to disappear!


Well I decided to open it anyway so I peeled the

corner back and ripped it open.

I could not bring myself to pull the paper out

so I just stood there for what seemed like a

half an hour I am sure it was one minute though.

Ok so here it goes I am pulling this paper out and

that’s that.


It’s folded in two just like all the others

when I unfolded it, there it was stamped in red ink

REJECTION! I can’t remember is this eight or nine!

“Oh!” well that doesn’t matter, I am already planning

for my trip tomorrow down that long black, drive way.

“Dum” “Da” “Dum” “Dum!” is this what Moses felt like?


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Joy Faire Stewart02/14/08
This is a very enjoyable read. I had an idea where it was going and was hoping for good news. Loved the positive attitude at the end. Right on topic.
Yvonne Blake 02/16/08
I know EXACTLY how you feel. I go to the mailbox everyday...hoping...hoping.
I'd rather get a rejection letter than not hear anything.
I think it should be named, "Dum, Da, Dum".
(smile)
Nancy Quinn02/17/08
I liked this! Keep up the great writing - Dum da dum! God bless, :)
Marlene Austin02/17/08
Interesting take on the topic. Nice job. :)
Joshua Janoski02/21/08
It's better to submit something and get rejected than to not submit anything at all. Keep on trying, and eventually you will receive that acceptance letter that you dream of. :)
Tessy Fuller03/01/08
I thought this was a great idea and I really wanted to know what was in the envelope. I did feel like it could of flowed a little better and there was some punctation I thought in the wrong place.