The Official Writing Challenge
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09/14/07
VERY good story!

The only thing that may be lacking is a strong tie-in to this week's topic--surprise.

Your writing is first-rate, and you may soon leave beginners if you keep this up!
09/17/07
Excellent, my friend! You may be a bit weak on topic, but the writing is terrific. :)
This will make a great devotional! I could not tie it into the topic, but your writing is excellent. I really enjoyed how you set everything up --- from the time to the math problems to the prayer and reminder of His grace. Great work! We'll see you in intermediate shortly.
09/18/07
This was very compelling - I could definitely feel your frustration. Good stuff!