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Comrades and The Zlimck
by Lyn Churchyard
03/20/08
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Comrades

Megan stared at the stain, horrified. Her mother was going to kill her! She’d leant into the car to get her sweater and now…

“I’m dead!” She moaned as she tried to wipe the ketchup off the driver’s seat.

“Thanks for trying to clean that up for me honey,” Her father’s voice made her jump, “I was winding up the window and I dropped my hotdog on the seat. Um, let’s not tell your mother!”





The Zlimck

Megan stared at the stain, horrified. Her shot had been automatic – automatic and deadly.

The poisonous Zlimck, which had been sitting on the Captain’s chair, was now just a blob. She scooped it up, dumped it into the airlock and dispatched it into space.

The ship’s doctor came onto the command deck looking harried. “Meg, if you see the Captain, tell him not to try shape changing again. He’s going to get himself into strife.”








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Holly Westefeld 24 Mar 2008
Excellent diversity, and fun reads. Loved the twists!
Betty Castleberry 23 Mar 2008
I like the twists at the end of both of your stories. Fun reads!
K. J. Cash 22 Mar 2008
She didn't make the hotdog plop and slop--oh what a relief it is! On the second one, you have no worries that anyone else wrote about Zlimcks. 5 stars for originality!
RuthAnn Cornelson  22 Mar 2008
Shape Shifters have to be so careful! I'm a Trekkie and loved the Sci Fi. The first one was fun too. Good job!
Sally Hanan 22 Mar 2008
Your second one was brilliant!
Joanney Uthe 21 Mar 2008
I can image Megan's relief and anger at her father in the first story. And the feeling of dread in the realization of what she's done in the second! Great writing and definately different genres.
Kristen Hester 21 Mar 2008
Great job on two very different genres. Awesome writing and super stories. Bravo.
Jan Ackerson  21 Mar 2008
Oh, Lynne, hardly anything literally makes me laugh out loud, but that second one just slayed me! Perfect!
jodie banner 21 Mar 2008
ROFL,you have such a great sense of humor.
Loren T. Lowery 21 Mar 2008
Three cheers for good ole dads! I really liked both stories and the second one was a blast, and although a bit sad, made me smile, nonetheless.
Tim Pickl 21 Mar 2008
Love the contrast--hot dog and scifi!
Mo 21 Mar 2008
Both were great! Great surprise endings, especially in the 2nd.




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