The Official Writing Challenge
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03/03/16
Though a well- written piece, this was a heartbreaking entry on many levels. I am uncertain as to the point you are trying to make.
This was a thrilling story. For some reason, I thought it was set before 9/11 so the ending not only gave me shivers but surprised me. You did a stunning job of tackling a different take on start.
03/04/16
Whoa! I did NOT expect that ending! I felt sure you'd "tidy it up" so it would feel good. THANKYOU that you did not. It was, however, incisive and I was left wondering whether it contributed to a genuine understanding of the Muslim mind or agenda.
03/04/16
Good title, by the way 😀
03/04/16
Powerful!
Blessings~
03/05/16
Hatred can sometimes begin early. Suspenseful piece of writing with a fitting ending.
I think you put a lot of thought in to this peace. If I am not over-thinking it, I see a couple of distinct contrasts. First, the irony and apathy that many young people do not avail themselves of the educational opportunities available, while those who have left countries with less opportunities are keenly aware of and seize the golden opportunity. Secondly, there is the irony of the shallow group of bullies being faced with someone who truly plans violent intimidation. Nicely done.