The Official Writing Challenge
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10/11/14
Ah, the joys and sorrows of adolescence in 750 words! My heart broke for you both as I read this tender piece. Your MC got more out of the lesson than many his age, so the pain proved valuable to him. You did a fine job of presenting the characters, conflict and resolution. I found your work delightful. Thank you.
10/11/14
Ah, the joys and sorrows of adolescence in 750 words! My heart broke for you both as I read this tender piece. Your MC got more out of the lesson than many his age, so the pain proved valuable to him. You did a fine job of presenting the characters, conflict and resolution. I found your work delightful. Thank you.
10/13/14
I love that this is just a short snippet of time but you were able to convey a wealth of emotion and apply the lesson so well. Most boys would not have gotten the point so quickly. I prat that Fay sees this. I'm glad I did.
10/13/14
The fact that you'd learned a valuable lesson that you applied to life was probably worth the "harsh" reality that transpired. A lesson well learned is a lesson carried out forever.

Great writing. I felt as if I was right there.

God bless~
I enjoyed the story you wrote.
Good lesson for all of us.
Well done
10/16/14
Hey congrats on the EC! I'm a little behind in my comments, but so glad I took the time to read your entry. A lesson well delivered, with heart. Great work!
10/18/14
Congratulations.

God bless~