The Official Writing Challenge
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12/05/12
Oh wow! What great description - by using action and dialogue instead telling.
I could feel the heartache and love. The ending was perfect.
I love the name Alistair! Very distinguished and fun, it gave an elegant tone to this little story. I'm glad he decided to move for the sake of his wife, even knowing that it might cost him his career. Nicely done!
12/05/12
Great story! I could see this expand as a short story in a magazine. Nicely done.
God bless~
12/09/12
Interesting twist on Bloom. You did a great job writing about the MC's love for his wife and his willingness to let his compassion swallow up fear and move him to sacrificial love.