The Official Writing Challenge
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09/04/09
At the start, I was very confused and initially thought it was a mistake, but after reading the whole piece, decided it was a masterstroke of genius. Your MC was confused and dazed and hallucinating and you made the reader feel that. Very well done. I enjoyed it immensely.
After several reads, I thought the "beeps" must be the sound of the machines in the hospital keeping alive the person who'd been injured. You presented the dream sequence very well.
09/04/09
I was expecting this to be about football--but not at all disappointed that it wasn't. Not sure I get the tie in to the topic, but found the story interesting.
What a great piece of writing. You'll place high with this one! Kudos!
What a great piece of writing. You'll place high with this one! Kudos!