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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: The Critique/Review (for writers) (05/06/10)

TITLE: My Better Part
By Mary Lou Tiner
05/12/10


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My Better Part


I put the last touches on my masterpiece,
And I proudly dropped it in his lap.
“Be honest and tell me, what you really think.”
But he looked like a mouse in a trap!

My number one critic, this man I trust most,
Really dreads giving me these reviews.
He makes his appraisals while walking on egg shells,
For he knows just how easily I bruise.

I could tell by the way he kept scanning the text,
And I knew he was just buying time.
His eyebrows were raised; he kept clearing his throat,
As he questioned the meaning and rhyme.

He cautiously offered a comment or two;
I was starting to make my defense.
But I stopped and I looked in his tender blue eyes,
And I quieted my arguments.

I went back to my office and scribbled and scratched.
There’s no doubt he was right all along.
I swallowed my pride and rewrote half the text,
For the truth is, he’s never been wrong!

I finally was learning to heed his advice,
And accept the great gift of his heart.
He gently critiques, blending love with the truth.
He’s my husband and my better part.


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Benjamin Graber05/13/10
Sweet poem! Good job with this one!
stanley Bednarz 05/13/10
Simply adorable. "Mouse caught in a trap," that put me there.
Brian Haugrud05/13/10
This put a smile on my face...The rhythm & rhyme, I thought worked well. Its a wise mature woman who can admit her husband is right:)))
Genia Gilbert05/14/10
I like this very much. My husband also critiques for me, and I know I can trust him to tell the truth, even with a glare or two from me. lol
Brenda Shipman 05/17/10
So sweet! A wonderful tribute to your kind critiquing husband, AND to you - a humble teachable wife. Precious poem! (I also love the title.)