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I enjoyed this all the way through, but especially the last line. So true! Well done!
Some clever interplay of Scripture.
I was a little confused by your last line. I assumed that Jared and Daniel were still boys, in which case I felt that Jared's use of language was a little too grown up to be authentic. However maybe they're meant to be adults on a visit home, in which case it sort of fits. I think I got myself confused somewhere along the way!
Regardless of the above, some great tomfoolery and an apt message too.
If I was the mother, I quess I would have to look on the bright side of these two fighting leat they know the Bible. lol Nice job!
This is cute and fun! One little vocab note (and maybe it was just a typo): 'loose' is an archaic word meaning 'set free'. I assume you meant 'lose'.