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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 – Advanced)
Topic: Hide and Seek (08/07/08)

TITLE: One Night In The Garden
By Tammy Johnson


Two pair of eyes blended into rich green foliage. A shrill twitter from a branch above broke the silence.

“Shhhh!” The eyes moved upward. Frowns scowled at the bright green and blue feathered tattle tale. Leaves rustled and caressed bare arms as night air drifted through the garden. The woman pulled at her waxy shirt.

“Not another rip!” Dismay shadowed the feminine eyes. “How much time do you think we have?”

Eyes strained upward once more as the man tried to spot the exact location of the bright yellow sun in the orange streaked sky.

“Not enough time to fix that.” His eyes dropped to the leaf covering him and his wife had clumsily made. He shifted his eyes to his own hairy thigh peeking through a rip in his covering.


Lush green leaves surrounded brilliant, full fruit.

“One taste, please?” The musical lilt escaping from her full, colorful lips put him in a trance. His gaze sunk into the depth of those pleading eyes as her curvy arm extended the fragrant fruit. Reason was drowned out by the warmth of her soft caress on his arm and he reached for the forbidden fruit.

The fruit was warm and sweet. Juice dripped down his chin. The soft hand reached out again to wipe away the juice but before it could, he took a step back. Eyes opened wide and he took in every detail of the body attached to the hand. A glance down his body confirmed the same condition. Muscles tensed as the urge to run came over him. A surge started in his belly and glowed in his cheeks.

Eve opened her eyes wide before turning and running into the nearest hedge of plants. Adam hesitated before running into the opposite direction toward a fig tree.


A tingle jolted Adam’s entire body as the sun dipped a little lower in the trees. It would soon be time…only tonight he did not look forward to it.

“What are we going to do, Adam? He’ll be here any minute!”

A rock crunched. Adam’s lips paused in the shape of a “shush”. Wide eyes reflected his terror. He pulled Eve further down into the leaves.

“Adam?” A gentle voice Adam had loved to hear now pierced him with that new horrid feeling in his stomach. He glanced at Eve, her face an odd white. No breath escaped either pair of lips.

“Eve, where are you?”

A flash of brown scuttled through the bushes. Eve yelped as a rabbit rushed over her foot and into the next bunch of green. Before Adam could ponder the realization that even the animals were now hiding, a hand reached through the foliage and pulled the leaves apart.

“Why are you hiding?” Adam sensed a hint of sadness in the slow gentle words. He wanted to gaze into the eyes of the one he loved so dearly, but moisture clouded his vision. He kept his gaze lowered.

“I’m afraid.” The whispered words were almost too faint to hear.

A strong, gentle hand lifted Adam’s face. Concern etched the face of his Lord.

“Why are you afraid, Adam?”

“I’m…I mean I was…and now I’m aware…um…that…I was naked.”

A tear spilled from the gentle eyes staring back at Adam.

“Who told you that you were naked, Adam? Have you eaten from the tree that I commanded you not to eat from?”

Adam gulped as if the fruit were still in his throat.

He turned wide eyes and a pointed finger toward Eve. But Adam’s attempt to blame her availed as little as Eve’s following attempt to blame the serpent.

“Ah, Adam and dear Eve.” The shameful couple grasped the large gentle hands leading them out of the bush and into an embrace. Adam felt the breath of his Lord caress his face as he spoke.

“Your innocence is lost. Both good and evil are intimate with you now.”

A tear moistened the top of Adam’s head.

“You can not stay in this garden. The danger of your eating from the tree of life is too great.” Releasing Eve, the Lord put both hands on Adam’s shoulders. Adam met the steady gaze before him.

“Your innocence must be redeemed. I have a plan, but it will take time. You must both now toil in pain until my plan is complete.”

Tears flowed down Adam’s face as he reached for the sobbing Eve. Together they bid their Lord good-bye and began their search for a different life.

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Joy Faire Stewart08/15/08
With rich descriptive writing, you have captured this sad event.
Sara Harricharan 08/20/08
Your title reminds me of the retelling of the Esther story, and the story itself is even better! I loved this fresh new look and especially the closeness and tenderness you portrayed. This was different-you certainly did good here! ^_^