The Official Writing Challenge
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06/16/06
Strong personal testimony. Thanks for posting. Oh, a hint - look at the number of times the preposition "in" is used in the last paragraph.
06/16/06
I still struggle with my Dad passing away and perhaps that is why I don't connect with you on this. I get the emotional aspect, but when you write about God's plan I lose where you are going or coming from. How were you planning to continue the relationship with your dad? Trips? Projects? Visiting?This is part of my disconnect. I would like to have read something more, perhaps specific, that showed me why your dad's passing was difficult and how God brought you thru the time. Those are the kinds of things, perhaps those of us still struggling with loss are looking for. I think I am.
06/18/06
God speaks to us in many ways, taking circumstances of life and using them to make us and mold us after His will. Your testimony reaffirms this truth. Thank you for sharing! :) Be careful about using prepositions at the end of your sentences; some punctuation tweeking would help as well. I enjoyed reading this -- good word!