Hire
Writers
Editors
Home Tour About Read What's New Help Forums Join
My Account Login
Shop
Save
Support
E
Book
Store
Learn
About
Jesus
  

Win A Publishing Package HERE            

The HOME for Christian writers! The Home for Christian Writers!
The Official Writing Challenge

BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN

INSTRUCTIONS

how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level

ENTRIES

submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners



Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.





TRUST JESUS TODAY

TRY THE TEST



Share
how it works   Submit

Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Love (04/27/06)

TITLE: Love's Final Destination
By Jennifer Argotsinger
05/03/06


 LEAVE COMMENT ON ARTICLE
 SEND A PRIVATE COMMENT
 ADD TO MY FAVORITES

Love’s Final Destination
When they got home to the enormous mansion on the beach, Allison took her young daughter upstairs. She laid her sleeping daughter on her bed, not even bothering to take off Nicole’s swimsuit.
Walking back downstairs she thought about her divorce. The papers had come yesterday and that was why they had spent the day at the beach. So they could get their minds off “him”. When they had gotten married it seemed so right. Over time however, it got worse. They had fought all the time even after Nicole was born.
The phone rang, breaking into her thoughts.
“Hello?”
“What are you up to?”
Her mother. She kept calling to check on her. It was nice at first, but then it got a bit annoying.
“Mom, what did I tell you last time you called?”
“Honey, you know I won’t listen to that!” Before her mother could say more, Allison hung up the phone. Allison went up to her room, put on her silk pajamas, and went to bed.
The next morning, after a restless night filled with hatred, guilt, and worry she took her coffee out back. It was gorgeous spring day with sun and cool breeze. She couldn’t believe she, with her lawyer’s salary, had found this gorgeous home. Allison needed the tranquility.
Out of the corner of her eye she saw the man running. She had never seen him before. All of a sudden as he stopped and walked into the house next to hers, her heart stopped for a split second. He was beautiful.
He had thick dark, curly brown hair and green eyes. She forced herself to look away from him, not wanting to stare. She turned to go back inside, a blush rising on her cheeks. To her surprise she heard a man’s voice behind her.
“Wait. I don’t believe we’ve met. I just moved in a couple months ago. I’m Jesse.” He extended a tan hand without a ring.
“I’m Allison Mapleton. Maybe, since we haven’t formally had a meeting, you could come over for dinner with me and Nicole.” Was she serious? This couldn’t be her talking.
“Nicole?” A look of disappointment in his eyes.
“My daughter.”
“Oh!” He said with a look of compassion in his eyes this time. “Well in that case, count me in.”
She walked away thinking what am I doing? I can’t possibly get involved with another man.
She spent the rest of the day preparing. She had told Nicole that a man was coming over for dinner. She understood that. Then at six o’ clock sharp, the doorbell rang. Running to the door in her silver heels and a pink skirt, she opened the door.
“Hi!”
“Wow. You look amazing.” He said as he stared.
“Thanks. This is Nicole.” She said as the little girl came up behind her.
“Hi! How old are you?”
“Six. I’ll be seven in a month.”
They sat down to dinner and talked about their lives, where they’d been, and family. After dinner as Nicole went to bed, Allison and Jesse went onto the deck with coffee.
“Nicole is adorable. Dare I ask where her father is?”
“I don’t know. He left right after her fifth birthday. I got the divorce papers the other day.” She looked down, a tear falling from her eye. To her surprise Jesse reached up and whipped it away.
“I’m sorry. That jerk isn’t worth your tears.” He tilted up her face so her eyes met his. Then, he leaned down and kissed her. "I love you and will never leave you. Not as long as I live. I'll never leave Nicole either."
"I love you too." She kissed him and they lived happily ever after.


The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be right now. CLICK HERE

JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.


This article has been read 410 times
Member Comments
Member Date
Edy T Johnson 05/10/06
Well, I hafta say, this started out as a realistic story. But, what happened? The middle part troubled me (all of a sudden she is attracted to a stranger?). And, the ending just made me laugh, it was so UNbelievable. Was that what you meant to do? Or, am I missing a big chunk of something I don't see? Good writing, otherwise.