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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Love (04/27/06)

TITLE: PILLOW TALK
By Genstacia Bull
05/03/06


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“How do you know when you fall in love?” Tasha asked Trena her identical twin sister as they lay on their beds with the pink bedside lamp separating it.

“You tell me. You’re the one with a boyfriend!” Trena replied as she stifled a yawn.

“Oh come on Trena, you may not have a boyfriend but with all the books you read you sure know a lot more than you let on.”

Tasha rolled from her back to her side and propped herself up on elbow so she could face her sister. Her chestnut hair tumbled across her back as she changed position.

“Well, for a small fee….” Trena giggled as she turned to face her sister for their usual late night advice session.

Trena was wise beyond her years, whereas Tasha was a social butterfly both were intelligent but Trena was just that bit intuitive and her sister trusted in that.

“Tee! You don’t want me to beg do you?”

“A bit of grovelling would help. All right, so you want to find out if you are in luuuuvvv with Jake?”

“Hmm.” Tasha flashed her most adorable smile, the one that Trena could not say no to.

“Okay.”

Trena sat on her bed with her legs folded in yoga position under her cotton peach nightdress. Tasha mirrored the position; she wore the same nightdress in lilac. She fluffed her lavender scented pillow and hugged it to herself. They both hoped their dad won’t do his late night check on them, as he usually did to ensure they are asleep.

“I think you really like him, because that’s all we talk about these days. You sit staring at your cell phone just waiting for it to ring, you are disappointed when it good ole Susie and not Jake”

Trena paused and waited for her sister to digest the information. She stretched out her hand and reached for her brown stuffed dog, she stroked the furry ears since that was the only area left that had fur left, over the years the furry parts had dispersed in between pillow fights.

“Does that mean I am in love with him?” Tasha said looking a bit confused

“According to my magazines; you may be in love when you can’t wait to see him. When you know his faults and still like him the way he is, when you day dream about him. Tash you think about him all the time, your face lights up when you are on the phone with him. I’ll say you are in love.”

“Mom says it’s puppy love, but she got married to dad didn’t she, so why does she make fun of it?”

A rap on the door interrupted their chatter.

“Girls, do you have any idea what time it is?”

Their Dad’s musky cologne always travelled ahead of him. He popped his darker shade of chestnut head through the door.

“Girls” He said in a pleading tone.

“Daaaaad, it’s a Friday night could we just have an extra ten minutes and then we will put the lights out.” Tasha promised

“Alright sweethearts, ten minutes. Otherwise your mom will be upstairs and you know that batting your eyelids and the pitiful voice won’t work with her. Sweet dreams”

“Thanks dad” they replied in unison

They waited till they heard the click of the door lock.

Tasha said “ I don’t know if I am in love or not but what I do know is, I want my marriage to be like mom and dad they are so tight even when they fight”

“Hmm” Trena concurred. “Couldn’t agree more”

“Goodnight Tee”

“Night Tash”


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Debbie OConnor05/05/06
This is cute and realistic. There were a few run-on sentences and small mistakes, but overall, this is a very good entry.
Sherry Wendling05/06/06
Good stuff! Really cute dialog, good flow. Realistic enough to take me back to many late pillow-talks with my own sis, over 45 years ago. Thanks for this!
Rachel Rudd05/09/06
Cute Story!

There was one sentence I couldn't understand.
"Trena was wise beyond her years, whereas Tasha was a social butterfly both were intelligent but Trena was just that bit intuitive and her sister trusted in that."

Sweet sisterhood!