The Official Writing Challenge
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06/05/14
Good story with realistic dialogue and ending.

Nicely done!

God bless~
I needed to know what group, club or business they were in. I was expecting to find this out before it ended.

This writing showed both pride and humility through actions and descriptions. I liked this.

Maybe I was just supposed to put them in any organization and look at the results because of pride.
06/11/14
I liked the dialogue, but I wasn't certain what the voting was all about. Your wording is good, but I think you might improve the piece a bit by adding in some clues as to what type of group it is. You did an excellent job of describing the MC's change in walk, I could visualize that part well. Keep up the good work. We are happy to have you on board here in the challenge.
06/13/14
Congratulations!

God bless~