The Official Writing Challenge
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10/24/05
Excellent writing!You caught me by surprise when you first made the transition into the plot..it flowed nicely.
10/25/05
Way to keep us hanging!! Did she turn to Christ or return to Brad? Good suspenseful writing!
10/26/05
Good building of tension in your writing. I was confused for a second because I didn't remember the doctor's name was Brad, but that's me. I liked how you weaved her spiritual condition in with her care of Mrs. O'leary. Nice job!
WOW! Goosebumps. I like this one! The ending is absolutely marvelous! "A voice distracted her as she stepped toward the rain." So often that's the case. Thanks for sharing!
10/28/05
More! More! The question now is: What will be her choice? So often we fail when tempted because we have become comfortable with our sin and feel lost without it. It seems strange but true. Only the love and prayers of others can bring to bear all the power of Heaven to free us from our destructive ways. I loved this story. It is very true-to-life:)