The Official Writing Challenge
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09/13/05
Excellent illustration! I had never heard anything like it. It is a little bit of a stretch as far as the topic word 'Bon Voyage' but good message none the less
09/13/05
Excellent illustration! I had never heard anything like it. It is a little bit of a stretch as far as the topic word 'Bon Voyage' but good message none the less
09/13/05
I suggest that you take the middle section out and expand it into a short story, and put the beginning and the end together to be an excellent illustrated devotional. Both are good, but they don't seem to belong together.
Good article. I like the way you showed the comparison between the bottle that may look empty and the soul that feels empty; that in reality the soul devoid of Christ will be filled with things that leave it feeling empty.
Nice metaphor. I'd cut the last two paragraphs and tighten the story of the two men a bit.