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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Husband and Wife (08/08/14)
Adam, you went down a man and rose a husband.
Your wife from your ribs HE did mend.
Can you handle it?

Adam, what sort of helper will she be?
She will from her father and mother flee.
Can you handle it?

Adam, she is “bone of your bones, flesh of your flesh”.*
Her life with yours will mesh.
Can you handle it?

Eve, you were created while he slept.
From your husband’s ribs you leapt.
Can you handle it?

Eve, what sort of helper will you be?
You will from your father and mother flee.
Can you handle it?

Eve, you are “bone of his bones, flesh of his flesh”.
Your life with his will mesh.
Can you handle it?

Yes, you can.
Our Father above,
Rained down HIS love,
When He created husband – and wife.

Yes, you can.
Helpers come in all shapes and sizes,
United a new family arises,
When two join as husband – and wife.


Yes, you can.
It is unique and amazing,
That with a certificate and a ring,
Couples can build a new life together – as husband and wife.


* Genesis 2:21-24 (NKJV)
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Sheldon Bass 
08/17/14
Very interesting poem. I'm not able to critique poetry, but this has merit. I like the simplicity, yet importance of the quick message. Its brevity will appeal to many, I think.
Keep on submitting entries!
C D Swanson 
08/17/14
I enjoyed your well written poem...on topic and well done.

God bless~
Larry Whittington
08/17/14
I liked how you changed the last line first line around.

That made for an interesting format.
Joe Moreland
08/17/14
I liked this compact, meaningful poem. I'm not a poet, and not really qualified to judge whether something is truly good, but I'll tell you whether I like it or not.

I did. :)

The transition from Adam, to Eve to "them" was smooth and effortless and along the way you drove home the point that it's neither of us that truly "handles it", but God who puts us together and makes it possible for anything to be handled by two He has joined together.

Very nice work.
Rachel Barrett
08/17/14
I liked that. The rhythm kept leading smoothly from verse to verse. I am not an experienced poet, but I found it "reader-friendly", if that makes sense.

Great message!
Bea Edwards 
08/18/14
Clever from your title all the way through.
Can't imagine you've not written poetry before.
You brought a unique perspective to the first married couple.
Phillip Cimei
08/18/14
Very different and unique. I enjoyed it. I too do not have the ability to critique this except for how it grabbed me. I liked it for its message and uniqueness.
Noel Mitaxa 
08/19/14
A simple but powerful structure keeps this entry zeroing in on your message. Well done.
Amelia Brown 
08/21/14
You've presented a different take to the topic. interesting poem. Keep writing.