The Official Writing Challenge
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11/16/07
You selected a great example to illustrate your point.

Consider opening the piece with the anecdote about Amsterdam. It will draw in the reader.
11/18/07
I love those "God coincidences", don't you? A very neat story. Starting with that might have grabbed readers a bit more. Keep writing!
11/19/07
That must have been really wonderful! I like this and it's just like God to illustrate the message in this way! Nice work