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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Astonishment (02/02/12)
The head teacher walked into the hall
Confident, ready to take assembly
Children hanging on his every word.

Suddenly at the back there is movement
A scuffle has broken out
And the worst boy in the school comes forward

“Hey! You! Why are you wearing that
It was my dad’s favourite tie?
Where did you get it from?!”

The head teacher seems taken aback
And looks round to his staff sitting near
But they seem not to notice

“It was left behind at the summer fair Johnny”
“I liked the look of it and put it on
You can have it back if you want”

Suddenly there is a struggle and flash of metal
Johnny is standing with the cut off part of the tie
And a pair of scissors, smiling

The children are open mouthed and yet silent
No one has ever done this before
Cut off the head teacher’s tie

“It’s alright children we have planned this!”
The heads intervention is unusual
And silence invites more explanation

“It’s Easter next week and no doubt you will remember
The women who went to the tomb trying to explain
That Jesus was alive”

“If you think the disciples were stupid not to believe it
Try and explain what happened in this assembly
To the children who missed school today”

“What will you say to convince them you are right
Without photos or teachers to back you up.”
Sometimes unbelievable things happen.
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/10/12
I really enjoyed this. I wonder if it would have a greater impact had you told it in a story format and use the extra words to really paint a picture. I do think it was a genius way to show kids what it must have been like on that first Easter so long ago. Great, creative take on the topic with a nice twist in the end.
C D Swanson 
02/11/12
Very creative-good approach. A very interesting and powerful ending. Good job.
God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/17/12
Congratulations for ranking 7th in level one!
Connie K Cameron
02/19/12
I read your poem and I had a hard time with it. This piece is unusual too, but you have such a way with words, I'm drawn to your work. Like I said on the other piece, Im a bit slow. I would like to read more.

Connie K Cameron