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By Vaughn Miller
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“I have been here the whole time, right by your side” said the father. “What? If you have been here the whole time, why didn’t you say anything?” “I did but you always kept busy watching TV, playing on the computer, texting on your cell phone, listening to your IPod… Should I go further?”
The girl thought a moment and then defended, “You gave me all that stuff! Shouldn’t I use it and get my monies worth?” “If it comes between us, no” he said sternly.
“All I ever do is think about you! I watch TV to hear a message from you, I search the internet to find you, and I listen to music all about you, I text people to ask if they’ve seen you, I meet with my brothers and sisters to talk about you…”
“Shhh. Be quiet and meditate upon my words: ‘And after the earthquake a fire, but the Lord was not in the fire; and after the fire [a sound of gentle stillness and] a still, small voice.” (AMP 1 Kings 19:12)
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For clarification, it'd be better to space between each speakers' paragraph:
“It’s about time” said the expectant girl, “we need to talk.”
Her father replied, “Okay talk to me.”
“Well I’ve missed you, and I can never find you. Where have you been I’ve been waiting so long?”
I enjoyed this and would have like to read more--I encourage you to use your full 750 words. Your writing has lots of potential.
I really liked how you brought the Bible verse in the end. This is the start of a great devotion.