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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Light and Dark (05/21/09)
Bush Walking

In the bush I wander
Alone, just on my own.
I marvel at the beauty
Of this place I've never known.

The trees rise high in grandeur
As if to touch the sky,
And plants beside the track
Seem to laugh as I walk by.

My eyes peer through the darkness
Where the bush is very dense.
A bird sends out a call
Awakening my ear sense.

I listen in the stillness
And hear a mountain stream,
A pigeon on the wing,
Startled it would seem.

I keep walking on the pathway
As the bush now thins a bit,
And dappled patterns dance,
As the light through trees does flit.

I find a perfect site
And sit upon a seat,
With that burbling river
Splashing near my feet.

The light now streams in brightly
Between trees on either side,
Making the water sparkle
In unrestricted pride.

I ponder on the meaning
Of all the things I've seen,
The enchantment of the bush
And the quiet peace serene.

My mind goes to my maker
The creator, God my Lord,
Who made this place of wonder
With things all in accord.

I say a prayer to thank Him
For helping me to see,
His light shines in the darkness
Like the sun shines through a tree.
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Jeanne E Webster
05/29/09
Thank you for such an enchanting stroll. Grand visuals, such as, "His light shines in the darkness Like the sun shines through a tree"!

Nice meter and construction. Keep writing and I look forward to more of your works.
Jan Ackerson
05/31/09
That final image is amazing!
diana kay
06/03/09
I like this poem very much as it is going somewhere important just like the bush walk. I think the rhyming is mostly good and flows well except for the rhymimg in verse 3,4,5 where you had to swop words around and it grates a bit but I suppose even in walks there are [parts in the middle that are not smooth.
Deborah Porter 
06/06/09
Hi Christine. I just wanted to leave a quick note to let you know your entry, Bush Walking, actually did very well in the Light and Dark Challenge. Although you didn't receive an award, you made it into the Highest Rankings for Level 1, placing 8th in that Level. There were a lot of entries this week, and competition in Level 1 is always very intense, so give yourself a pat on the back. :-)

If you'd like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can find them here:
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Hope to see you at the FaithWriters' Conference in August. It’s going to be an amazing time of inspiration, information and encouragement.
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With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)