The Official Writing Challenge
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05/21/09
War does change people, and it was sad to read how it affected Azuka and his sister.

I really like this paragraph with its emotional tension, love of the sister for her brother, and the bit about drawing the hearts on his back: "I reached out to my brother, he pulled back. I tried again, holding his arm firmly. Closing the gap between us I hugged him. He stiffened at first not wanting to yield to my embrace. I drew little hearts on his back like I always did when he was younger.
I felt him relax. He trembled in my arms and let out the torrent of emotions buried inside him."

Nice writing! :)