The Official Writing Challenge
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04/24/09
Very creative poem, I like the take on the topic. You put a touch of the sinful nature in Adam and Eve before the fall which made them more real to us, even if not Biblically accurate. The last line is the essence of the whole poem and a great message.
Not exactly how it went, but a creative entry.
You have a fine way with both words and meter and your poem has almost a song-like lilt and quality to it.
What a great whimsical way to point out the impact of the choices we make and the sinful nature of man. I really like the rhythm of the poem and the way it relates to how we live today. Great job. Keep on writing!