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75 Word Mini Challenge Megans March 2
by Tim Pickl 
03/20/08
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75 Word Mini ChallengeMegan’s March 2




Ultra-Short Story #1
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Megan stared at the stain, horrified.

“Lord—please—don’t show me this again. I forgave my father last night…
I don’t understand…”

“This is your heart, Megan.”

Instantly, Megan realized the crimson stain she saw was inner hurt.
Overwhelmed by memories of childhood oppression, she sobbed.

Megan muttered, “I hid it for so long. It hurts so much. Lord, please
heal me--help me—please…”

“Your faith has made you whole…”

Megan woke up, thankful.






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Ultra-Short Story #2
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Megan stared at the stain, horrified.

This could only mean one thing, she thought. Minnie died.

Grandma Megan meandered into the house, desperately
calling to her kitty.

“Mini-Minnie! Minnieeee-meow!? Where are you, honey?”

Silence. Just the sound of the faucet dripping in the kitchen.

Oh…no… nooo… Lord, please let her still be alive. She’s my baby.
She’s my only friend, now that I’m old.


“Mini Minnie-Meowww!?” Megan hobbled slowly to her bedroom.

“Ohhh…there you are!”

Meoooow-purrrr....




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For the Ultra-Short Story “Mini Challenge” posted on FaithWriters here:

http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=18749

Guidelines:
1. Write two ultra-short stories (no more than 75 words each)
2. They should be completely different in mood, tone, genre
3. Each should BEGIN with this sentence:

Megan stared at the stain, horrified.


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--bro. tim pickl
Thursday March 20, 2008 A.D.



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Holly Westefeld  22 Mar 2008
I like the follow-up with your first Megan. I'm sure glad the kitty was ok, but am still wondering what that stain was that scared poor grannie Megan.
Lyn Churchyard  21 Mar 2008
Well done Tim, story #1 gave an insight into your first Megan story. I'm so glad you didn't hurt the kitten. I love cats. This one was so touching.
Jan Ackerson  20 Mar 2008
Okay, Tim, putting a kitty story in there is a blatant attempt to influence the judge! (just kidding...but I do love the kitties). Love your little mini-sermons, bro.
Karen Wilber  20 Mar 2008
Wow, oh wow, your first story is terrific. Great message. Thanks for not killing the kitty in the 2nd story. You had me worried!
K. J. Cash 20 Mar 2008
The first one was a continuation...how clever!!! Cute kitty story too!
Kristen Hester  20 Mar 2008
Very nice! I was glad the kitty was okay, also.
Joanney Uthe  20 Mar 2008
Having read your other two made the ending of the first story even more unexpected. Very good writing and great message. You do a great job of brining in the senses in the kitty story.









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