The Official Writing Challenge
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05/09/19
Good take on the subject. Just a little thing - it is 'just deserts' not 'just desserts'.
05/10/19
A unique view of the topic. Well done.
Interesting take on the story. Just desserts, indeed, but what a lovely way to end the story! Well done.
You have a spuspenseful story here. I like your take on the MC and you did a good job of developing him. The pacing was a wee bit slow for my taste, but you have a good message that fits the topic, and I liked the unexpected ending.
Congratulations on ranking 15 overall. Happy Dance!