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I had to look up the word "layby." I figured that's what you meant, but checked it out. I enjoyed your story, but wonder if someone's attitude would change so fast? I appreciate learning British terms and great job on the dialoging!
You have a great message in this piece. It's so easy to get caught up in our own world, yet forget it's so much easier with Jesus. I noticed a few little things. You had a POV shift where you went from the wife's thoughts to the husband's. I couldn't help but wonder how a public defender could afford a jaguar. You did a nice job of pulling the reader in right away. You had a couple of great conflicts. Although the ending was maybe a bit too tied up nicely in a bow, I still enjoyed it and thought it was a nice message. You definitely nailed the topic. Good job.