The Official Writing Challenge
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07/26/18
I really liked the voice you gave your MC. And it was consistent throughout this fun story with a great message. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. The only red ink is that a couple of your paragraphs didn't have a line spaced between them but that's an easy fix. Great job.
07/29/18
This was a fun entry to read. I could see and hear the people and the scene as it played out.
I enjoyed this fun story--especially the narration and the smile at the end!
07/30/18
A fun read and a great example of making lemons into lemonade. Cute story!