The Official Writing Challenge
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03/16/16
This was a heart-warming story. I liked all the questions that the MC pondered.
Congratulations on ranking 16 overall. Happy Dance!
This is really lovely. Although there are a lot of government controlled stories out there, this felt fresh and I enjoyed it. You had details like working and the pet rescue that I've never seen before. I really enjoyed it. My only red ink is tiny. Okay should be spelled out or both letters capped--OK. You did a great job with making the dialog feel real too. :)