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I love 99% of this story. It is descriptive, and draws out the reader's emotions without being over done.
The only thing I did not care for was the very last sentence. To me, it seemed to take a giant leap in to the future, where I think a softer hint of the future would have not made the conclusion seem so abrupt.
Even so, I hope and believe this will do well.

I am glad that the MCs son found God's love through music.

This pulls at my heart. You did such a beautiful job with this stirring story. Only someone with an autistic child could even begin to imagine the pain and longing in the MC's heart, but you pulled me in and made me understand the best I can. That shows an incredible amount of talent. I almost felt like I was right there watching it all unfold. Outstanding job.
Beautiful, touching story. It seemed real. I think it might have been good to omit the last summary paragraph, and leave us in suspense re the future.
Congratulations on ranking 17th overall. Happy Dance!