The Official Writing Challenge
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03/04/16
Well done...a very good story that was well written.

Blessings~
So sad, but I think you got just the right tone and pathos for this story.
03/05/16
You have built this story beautifully, drawing us in to join you celebrating a small beginning that gently glows with quiet hope for Joelle.
Great work - and welcome back!
03/06/16
I was hooked from the start. The withdrawn little girl joining a loving and caring family, so well portrayed through the build-up of tension with the board game. And then the glimmer of hope with her words in the lone night-time game.

The story itself is a lesson in how to write well. I aspire to do that some day. Dream on girl! ;-)
03/06/16
Well constructed story. My heart broke for both the child and the new family. The ending suited the tone of the piece.
There is such power to this story. I have a lump in my throat. I hope everyone who reads it gets the underlying message, which is quite obvious to me, but I know sometimes people read these stories a bit fast and might miss it. My heart just ached at what must have been going through the little one's head when told she had to start over. This is such a powerful voice for foster kids. So many want to go home, or worse, don't even understand what home is. I wish I could be a foster parent. I've dreamed of it for decades, but know my health problems would interfere with a child's needs for continuity and security. I doubt I'll ever be able to foster a child, but I can pray for them, and your story encourages me to do just that. You did an outstanding job.
Jan, This is such a heartbreaking story. It brought tears to my eyes. Being so young, I hopes she learns to love the foster family as much as they love her. Great character development.

Congratulations on your 1st place win.
Congratulations! This is a very moving, powerful story.
03/10/16
Congratulations, Jan, on your 1st place EC award. It's always special to read a piece of your writing.
03/10/16
Quite impressive to jump in after three years and take 1st place! A hearty congratulations!
03/10/16
Congratulations on a well deserved first place! This story is moving, thought-provoking, and well crafted. I love your writing!
03/10/16
Well deserved first place win. The story brought out so much emotion in me- which is the sign of a well written piece.
03/10/16
Congratulations on your top placing Jan. Beautiful story which works so well on so many levels!
03/10/16
Congratulations Jan on your story, for placing first in Masters, and #1 Overall. Such a huge accomplishment that this requires all caps.

GREAT JOB JAN! YOU ARE AN INSPIRATION. GOD BLESS. :-}
03/10/16
Your last paragraph melted me.
03/10/16
I love this story, and all the emotion contained in it. Good foster parents are a gift from God, and you've painted a picture of the patience and love required to be one. My favorite part, although it's not an essential part of the story, is when Chuck mumbles goulash, and rolls over. It's just so real. Congratulations on winning a well deserved blue ribbon on this one!
Ah, Jan, nice to see you here! Congratulations!
Wow! Very powerful. Congrats on your #1 EC win.
03/11/16
Congrats!
Blessings~
03/11/16
Congratulations Jan! Though it was no surprise to see you in top spot with this well deserving entry. ;-)
03/11/16
Congratulations Jan! Though it was no surprise to see you in top spot with this well deserving entry. ;-)
03/22/16
I felt like I was part of the drama. Superbly written and a unique take on topic.
So good to have you back in the Challenge!