The Official Writing Challenge
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02/28/15
Interesting to read with a great ending - hope it does well in the Challenge.
03/01/15
This has the feel of a folktale, but with a wonderful Christian ending. If you leave and extra space between paragraphs, it will make it easier for the reader to understand. Well done - keep writing!
03/02/15
Fine writing and story telling. Great job with the topic...and powerful ending.

God bless~
03/05/15
Congrats Pauline!
God bless~
03/06/15
The imagery crafted by your words made this such an enjoyable read. I easily pictured your MCs. The message was clearly sent, so right on target with the topic.
Spacing in a story is important, as it gives the eyes a rest--that is my only red ink.
Congratulation on taking a ribbon with this interesting tale.
03/06/15
Your story was completely engaging. I loved the names you created and your fantastic ending. Congrats!
Your characters represented cultural conflict well, and reinforced the value of humility in Christ. Congratulations!