The Official Writing Challenge
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08/22/14
Wonderful detailed story that held my attention throughout. Great job.

God bless~
08/22/14
Thought provoking entry.

Was so glad that Pastor found the right words to convince Davey to go home and work on his marriage rather than give into his selfishness.

Thanks for a great read!
I enjoyed the wise pastor. The first sign of his wisdom was praying. We often forget how important that is.

Tiny red ink is when using pastor as part of a name it's capped. Examples : I went to talk to Pastor John. I went to talk to my pastor. Thanks for the talk, Pastor.

You did a great job of tackling the topic and your story was firmly built on the topic. You also made some great points and even did a twist on a phrase I use, devil's advocate. This is a good story that starts out right off the bat with an interesting dilemma and comes to a strong conclusion.
08/28/14
Congratulations!

God bless~
08/28/14
Congratulations on your EC.
09/02/14
I really liked your choice of story for this topic.
You wrote 'the enemies lies of freedom from bondage' -
Thankfully we know the only freedom from bondage is freedom from self, aye?
I think your entry highlighted that nicely!