The Official Writing Challenge
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This read like a magazine story, I was waiting for it to continue...great job!

Thank you. God bless~
Your entry captured my attention immediately. I've seem a few misplaced people in large cities talking to themselves as they meander along.

It felt real to me. I enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing.
Wow what a powerful story. But for the brave of God for I. I. had teats welling up as I read this. Though some of the words seem nonsensical, it shows in utter chaos God still has a place for us.
I found this totally captivating. I love the clever way you unfolded this tale with all the little details. And then to find they were related - or maybe that was a delusion on the part of one or both. Either way I think this is a great story. Not sure what a persnickety thingy whack is but it seemed to fit with the piece. Great writing.
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