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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 4 – Masters)
Topic: Week(s) (02/10/11)
Two weeks late
The timer’s ticking
Two lines appear
My heart jumps

Eight weeks now
Morning sickness stays
When will it leave
My heart sinks

Twelve weeks in
I’m feeling good
Is this for real
My heart trembles

Eighteen weeks
Ultrasound day comes
Is all ok
My heart flutters

The tech works
She says it’s a girl
But now she frowns
My heart fears

A doctor’s called
Whispers exchanged
A cloud moves in
My heart shakes

I’m sorry
A serious defect
Won’t live past birth
My heart breaks

Options given
Advice pours out
Comfort lacking
My heart explodes

Terminate
I won’t listen
I love her too much
My heart doubles

“How far along?”
I’m twenty eight weeks
“Congratulations!”
My heart cries

Strangers smile
I’m uncomfortable
Kicks from within
My heart warms

Labor’s begun
No baby Not now
You’re safe with me
My heart clings

Labor’s strong
No medication
I feel her leave me
My heart denies

There’s no smiles
Only pity
They put her on me
My heart melts

She’s perfect
I gaze in her eyes
With one breathe
Her heart stops

I can’t let go
I rock her and hum
There’s movement about
My heart focuses

They’re reaching now
No I’m not ready
They say it’s time
My heart bleeds

I’m alone
It’s hard to breathe
Everything hurts
My heart struggles

Weeks pass
Grief travels onward
God shows Himself
My heart hopes

Life has purpose
She had hers
I have mine
My heart remembers
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Date
Carol Penhorwood 
02/17/11
I can't even begin to imagine the heartbreak!
Lollie Hofer 
02/19/11
Oh, the heartbreak. Wow! You did an excellent job of conveying what she was feeling and sensing all the way through. I liked the hope in the last two stanzas.
Anita van der Elst
02/19/11
Lump in my throat too. I liked the short phrases & that each 4th line tells us something about the speakers heart. Then the one line about the little ones heart, sort of symbolic of her short life.
Henry Clemmons
02/19/11
So sad, but honestly penned. I liked the way you used the heart at the end of each stanza. It's amazing how trong the heart is. Loved the message. Great job. You had a plan and executed it and created the emotion you wanted in your reader. A success.
Yvonne Blake 
02/20/11
Ahhhh... *tears for all those who have suffered the death of a child*
Catrina Bradley 
02/20/11
I love the short, but powerful, lines. I found myself racing through your poem, my heart alternately rejoicing and weeping. The ending leaves me with a sense of peace. A very effective work.
Glynis Becker
02/20/11
Very well done. So sad and poignant. The short phrases flow so well and the whole piece makes my mommy heart just break too! Fantastic.
Benjamin Graber
02/20/11
This would be so hard to go through! I really liked the ways you expressed the different feelings of the heart in each stanza!
Jody Day 
02/21/11
Much power packed into a short space. Very well done.
Margaret Kearley
02/21/11
Heartbreaking but wonderfully written. Sadness so beautifully expressed.
Rachel Phelps
02/21/11
So stark and heart-rending. Excellent! Well done on this awful topic.
Helen Curtis
02/23/11
You brought me to tears with this one, as friends of ours went through this less than a year ago. A beautiful ending, and a really powerful piece of writing.