The Official Writing Challenge
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I'm glad Sally knows her calling. Thanks for sharing. Blessings.
This is a pertinent story, especially in today's time. I was intrigued right away, but then confused. The order seemed out of whack. The MC complained about the meeting before it was announced. And it was never shown who (or how) it was announced. Add dialog, thoughts, and body language to paint a picture for your reader, to show rather than tell. You also have a POV shift where you shift into another character's thoughts. Remember the reader can only know what the MC sees, hears, thinks or says so show us in that format, have her have a discussion with her friend. You make some great points that make me stop and think for sure. You did a fine job of using both topics and you brought the story full circle. Good job.