The Official Writing Challenge
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What a sweet story!
01/12/20
Waiting is the hardest part but the end result is worth it. I love these success stories. Blessings!
I can relate to this. My daughter teaches first grade and I'm so proud of her. Perhaps add some internal dialog or body language to make it pop even more and avoid dramatic taglines like she moaned, he laughed, she wailed. Instead use a body language to show the frustrating. For example: "I'll never find a job!" Choking back tears, she swiped away the snot. Yeah that's graphic, and I did that on purpose to show how you can paint a picture, plus I love a good snot story. I also used a contraction and the words a bit to make it sound more authentic. We were taught not to use contractions in formal writing, yet most people speak using contractions. You did a great job writing on topic and have a clear message. Congratulations on ranking 13 overall. Happy Dance!