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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: FUSSY (11/17/16)
I must set the table, but oh dearie me,
How many guests are coming for tea?
Forks on the left, knives on the right,
I hope I’ve remembered everything tonight.
The napkins are folded, the candles are lit,
But wait, the tablecloth has a terrible split.
Back to the cupboard, this one will do,
Yet it’s not quite the right shade of delicate blue.
The chairs are still dusty, the floor needs a clean,
There’s so much to do, it must be pristine.
Now where will they sit? Place cards are needed,
It’s vital each knows where they are seated.
The music is soft, the lighting is low,
This really must be a grandiose show.
And now for the dinner. The steak is just tender,
The beans, squash and carrots sliced very slender.
The bread rolls are warm, the gravy is simmering,
The jelly is set like a red mountain quivering.
The cream is snow white, whipped and piled high,
I’m surveying it all with my critical eye.
The phone rings loudly, causing a fright,
Hubby shouts, “We’ll be dining at the pub tonight!”
“Sorry” says our guests, “change of plans,
Surely we will understand?”
“Oh no” I groan and fall in a heap,
“No worries” says he, “the dinner will keep.
Stop fussing Martha”, he adds with a smile,
“You need to relax, have a break for a while.
Switch off the stove, come take my hand,
Admittedly the pub won’t be so grand.
Let’s go out for dinner, and enjoy our friends,
This is the moment where your busyness ends.”
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Larry Whittington
11/27/16
Very well written with the rhyming words seeming to come naturally.

The twist at the end just seems to come unnaturally rude.

Nice writing. I like your style.
Lois Farrow
11/28/16
Fun story well written, and you can just imagine her stress putting together such a lovely meal. But the husband should have made his announcement much earlier BEFORE she had gone to all that work, and the mess would still be there to clean up when they came home! Apart from timing issues, well done.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
11/30/16
I love this. It flowed nicely and is a brilliant twist to the familiar Martha story. My only suggestion would be to change the title so the reader is surprised by the modern Martha. Even though poetry isn't my favorite genre, this is one of my favorites this week!