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This had me giggling right up to the last line when I started laughing heartily! I enjoy to people watch too, but hopefully, I'm not as critical as Agnes. But it is a nice reminder, we often judge on looks alone and if we think those thoughts, it won't be long before we speak them. Great story.
08/02/10
Ouch. You hit way too close to home for me:) Hopefully I'm never as bad as this crotchety old lady! Cute story. Glad Agnes got what was coming to her! :)
Ha ha ha and LOL, too funny. This was great, even though I shared Agnes' sentiments:) And btw...I too despise Pepto Bismol Pink!
08/03/10
Oh my gosh, this was hysterical. I was smiling and giggling the entire time!

And I LOVE the twist at the end! It really hit home. How often am I too busy judging others to notice the plank in my own eye?

I think, if I'm not careful, I may turn into Agnes in the not so distant future, and oh how I just love to people watch, especially in a hotbed like a food court.

great job!
08/04/10
Ouch! LOL! I love your title (and the alliteration). You had many fabulous lines, among them "Lady GooGoo" :) This was so enjoyable to read!
Very fun and easy to read! I loved hearing her thoughts and how they contrasted with what she actually said. Great writing!
A fun story with an implied, but very important message:
A critical nature demeans the criticizer. I Love how Agnes got her comeuppance.
08/04/10
Pride really does go before the fall. Great reminder for me to examine my heart and guard my tongue. Ouch!
08/04/10
Loved it! Loved it! Made me laugh! Just wondering if Agnes is aggravated everyday! Thanks I needed that!
08/05/10
I love humor and so I certainly enjoyed this. What a funny, well-written story. great all the way. Love the ending.

Mona
Yes, yes, yes!! I believe I know Agnes and her friend. This was well-written, with great imagery and dialog, and one of the best endings I've read in a long while. Great fun with a great message!
08/05/10
The gap is obvious! The way we think and perceive is certainly far from what our younger ones think today. Understanding one another will be a great achievement! Reminds me of Colossians 3:21.
08/05/10
I knew this was a winner. Congrats on your EC!

Mona
Hilarious!!!!! Thanks for the good story and good laugh!
Very nicely done! Congratulations...