The Official Writing Challenge
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This was fun to read a continuation of a prior entry!
Intersting left us needing more. Good writing.
This installment was the best of three entries. Although try as might I really don't recall people saying grrr!, as much as I have read it in this entry and others for this topic. That was the only thing I had a problem with. With Nan's grrring, the detective might have thought she was a wolf or something :) Overall good job.
Nothing like a detective story to hold one's interest. Mickey Spillane?
Keep telling the story.

Good job tying your entries together. Definitely a tantalizing read!
I'm glad you've decided to continue the story of Nan. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter!
I've said this before, this is definitely your genre. You are able to hold the suspense skillfully.
You really are trying to string us along aren't you. Well, it's working. I might have written the bit about Nan waiting for the coffee a bit differently, but that's the only slightly red ink I could find. I'm enjoying this adventure very much. Can't wait for the next instalment :-)
I enjoyed reading your entry. I find your detective a particularly strong character. I like the crime-lingo he uses, it makes him very "believable".
I was a bit disappointed that there wasn't a conclusive end, but I see from other comments that I'll have to stay tuned!
I, too am looking forward to hearing more. I'm also going to see if I can find the other articles it ties in with. You've piqued my curiosity.
Can't get enough. Keep it coming.
Cool, a sequel! And a well-written one at that. I'm enjoying the suspense and your strong character development. Can't wait to see how you tie in the "Ohhh."