The Official Writing Challenge
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04/19/07
This was a fun read!! The ending is sooo funny!!
04/20/07
Priceless. This will be a favorite of mine, I loved every word. The funniest was the flip flops one of the ex husbands. The ending was perfect, just like the entire work!
04/20/07
Funneee! Just what she needed for her wedding jitters. Hope you won't mind my pointing out it's salon, not saloon. Unless you did that for added laughs. A good job on the whole.
The surprise ending was great. I kept wondering what would be the final straw to get her out of the salon.
You're a great story teller...had my attention from beginning to end. Your humor and timing are terrific. I would only suggest paying more attention to punctuation, run-on sentences, etc. It would make this creative entry truly shine!
Oh! I'd get you! What a trick! You took me in too. Good job.
04/23/07
Very cute - descriptive writing with a good attention to some perfect details:)
You got me! That was great! I laughed out loud at the end. Very well told.
LOL! I have to love this piece...it is simply too funny. The replacement hairdresser was a real hoot! No wonder poor Sylvia was worried about her hair...nice twist at the end, maybe a tad bit extra would've helped to make it a little more. It's so quick, if you skim through the front it might be missed. ^_^ Love the title...
04/25/07
Sooooooooo funny and very creative!! :D Great characterization of Rose the hairdresser! In fact, I think I've seen her where I get my hair cut! :) Enjoyed reading this immensely!!
04/26/07
This is wonderful. I love a good prank and this is a good one and it is well told.
Back in the days when men wore white walls I went to a new barber. I chose him because I was a poor college student and he had the lowest prices in the neighborhood. This guy stood in one place and kept the chair moving as he used the clippers. I must have done ten or twelve revolutions before he finished using those clippers. He gave me a good haircut and I continued to go to him until I graduated. Once every two weeks I lived in fear that this time he would mess up...it seemed as if it was destined to happen one of those days, but it never did. Thanks this is a great story and it should finish in the top 40.
04/26/07
CONGRATULATIONS on your "Highly Commended"! You deserved it! This was so well-written and one of my favorites this week! :)
Congratulations on being highly commended. I loved your story, and was totally unprepared for the surprise at the end, which made it even funnier. Be careful with proofreading, spell check won't catch them all -- forever is one word and you wrote gong when I think you meant going. Other than that, it was perfect. I felt like I was right there in the salon with her. And almost as nervous too! Blessings, Cheri
04/27/07
I read about 25% of the humor stories from all four levels. It was a toss up for me whether your story or "Want an Apple" was the best I read. I'm glad that you placed in the top five. When I read "Cream Rinse is Extra" I was sure the writer was a woman. This makes your accomplishment that much better. Most men couldn't pull that off just as most women would have difficulty speaking with a male voice. Congratulations and thanks for your kind remarks.
04/29/07
Hi Nathan. Please forgive me for contacting you this way, but I need to check something about your entry in the Inspiration/Devotional challenge. I've sent you a PM, but not sure if you have access to that service.

Could you send me a PM with your email address as soon as possible. Then, if you have a hotmail, yahoo or aol account, would you mind checking the junk or bulk mail if you don't hear back from me fairly soon after.

Love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)