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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 3 - Advanced)
Topic: Writing (01/11/07)
The power of the stirring of dust

At that moment, the instant before
all hell cried vengeance,
the writing found its mark,
striking hammer hard.
Frowning faces fading to fear,
shame and the need to hide.

Law is law
brittle, uncompromising,
condemning and unflinching.
Sure of itself,
beyond testing, questioning
or a spirit of truth.

He sat there quietly stirring the dust
with a stick that pierced defences
surer than the sharpest sword.
No spoken words,
no vitriolic accusation of tongue,
no pointed finger
nor slanted glance,
just the stirring of dust.

They all slinked away to their personal depravities
holding their wounds in pincered grip;
indicted by inner voices
a jury released by stirred dust.

He sat there, no vestige of a smile,
stirring the world with words in dust.
The words changed,
lust becoming love
as the breeze rearranged shadows.
Sister where are those who condemn ?

His words still stir the dust
and hearts of lust
return to love.
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Date
darlene hight
01/18/07
Beautiful! Descriptive!
Marilee Alvey
01/19/07
Wow! What a unique take! The talent to write poetry escapes me, but I can certainly comment on the theme: Words certainly have power to change the world, but words stirred up in dust, surely one or two, had the power to save a woman and witness to many generations. Now, that's the power of the pen. This was a mighty message!
Pat Guy
01/19/07
Wow! I REALLY, REALLY enjoyed reading this! I LOVED it!
Jeanette Oestermyer
01/20/07
A very deep and meaningful piece. I truly enjoyed this, as I write a lot of poetry.

God bless
Edy T Johnson
01/21/07
My favorite lines, since I recognize the "hidden" meaning (not just dust on the ground, but Adam's offspring):
"His words still stir the dust
and hearts of lust
return to love." Powerful!
william price
01/21/07
This I liked! I liked a lot! I considered this story line myself. I'm glad I left it alone. I could not have communicated nearly as well as this. very nice job. God bless.
Anne Linington
10/26/08
"They all slinked away to their personal depravities.." what an amazing word picture? This is another excellent poem, and I have recommended your work to those I know will be interested in the quality of your poetry.
I did wonder if the title could be shortened to "The stirring of dust"-I do like brief titles- just a thought?