The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 225 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
The use of the word hyssop in the title got me interested. Upon reading, I was hesitant at first, thinking it was another version of the same old Bible story, but the humanity and social issues used kept me interested. The last line is the punch line! Loved that!
I think you did a great job of retelling this story. You pulled me in and kept me interested right to the end. Personally, I don't think you needed the last line. It felt a bit overdone and your story was on topic without ever using the topic word. You have some great descriptions too.