The Official Writing Challenge
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10/27/17
Great job communicating a nostalgic feel and ending with a bittersweet reality. I really enjoyed this piece.
Such a wonderful memory, that brought back my childhood memory of traveling with my parents and siblings, singing, playing game. No seatbelts needed in the long ago days. If the car came to a quick halt, parents or older siblings reach out to the young to keep them safe. And the way you brought the past to the present was wonderful.
10/31/17
Your story brought back many pleasant memories of growing up. We usually rented a cabin, my mom didn't enjoy cooking over an open fire pit or burner. Very descriptive writing.

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...participate[d] in group activities and outings.
It was a delight to read with you your reminisce. I could float along with parts as I put part of our six kids in an old station wagon without seat belt. They are all safely grown now.

Nice writing.
11/02/17
Congratulations on your 2nd place finish in the Intermediate category, Angela.