The Official Writing Challenge
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10/27/17
I really enjoyed the poem with all its references to memories but felt like it ended rather abruptly.
10/31/17
Were you raised in Africa or Australia? I liked your reminiscing about times past, but I wasn't sure if farm land described the territory in which you lived.

I think your ending veered off topic a bit. You were telling about raising grandchildren and then talking about a fire that destroyed much of your homeland. Just needed a bit of transition.
I like how you found rhyming words to tell your whole story. I think one key line about the value of old age was the memories it stored.

Thanks for your good thought that went into this.
11/02/17
I always enjoy reading your work, Dorothy.

Please let me know if you need someone to bounce ideas off of.