The Official Writing Challenge
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Wow! Double Wow! What more can I say?! Sensational masterpiece of Surprise wrapped up in such a short Span of Space! "GREAT"( use the Topic.).. ENTRY!
Very good job with a huge impact on the reader. I love surprise endings, and you pulled out a great one.

I would've liked to have known a bit more about the father/son relationship, or lack thereof. (Perhaps a flashback, dialogue, etc?)

Excellent work.
I didn't see that coming. Nice writing. I too would have liked to read more, but maybe the ending wouldn't of had the impact. I'm just not sure how this ministers, but it got my attention, no doubt about that.
What can I say, but that I agree with the earlier comments. Keep sending examples of your gift/talent for expressing powerful insights!
Whoa! Excellent piece of writing here! Keep it up!
powerful ... ugly, but powerful. An excellent reminder that the love of money is the root of all evil ... and gets past down from generation to generation