The Official Writing Challenge
BACK TO
CHALLENGE
MAIN
INSTRUCTIONS
how it works
submission rules
guidelines for
choosing a level
ENTRIES
submit your entry
read current entries
read past entries
challenge winners
Our Daily Devotional HERE
Place it on your site or
receive it daily by email.


TRUST JESUS TODAY

  • Share
  • how it works
  • Submit
Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Violation (04/04/24)
I back slid from Christianity when I was in grade 12. I drank my parent's wine, and a year later, I bought my own booze. I ate less of the time. I held a job as a cleaner, and a kitchen helper. I felt like a failure at school because of learning difficulties. I felt like an outsider in my family because my brothers were smart, and they were honor students, and I felt like the retarded one. I felt worthless even when I attended youth group. I enjoyed going to the young people's group, but part of me still felt different from the others.

When I was 21, I met a Christian boy from dating service. His name was John. We were dating each other for almost 2 months. I fell in love with him. He invited me to come to bible study with him. After that he decided that he only wanted to be friends with me. I felt that he lied to me when he told me that he loved me. I was sad, and I felt numb. I even introduced him to my parents the 2 time I saw him.

I continued to attend the bible study where he took me at first, and I saw him with another girl. My heart sank, and a lady who I met from the bible study took me home. On the way back to my apartment, she told me that John was not right for me, and that I should leave him alone.

I started drinking at the plaza, and thought about John, and his new girlfriend who I met at the bible study. I wondered if she was better or smarter than I was.

I met another guy through a dating service. His name was Dana, and he was from the military. We went out to see a shows, and then he took me to the army base to a bar. We were not in love. We were just friends. He did not love me. He only cared for me as a person. After seven months we stopped seeing each other. Looks like he moved on, and got married, because when I saw him at a Brian Adams concert, it looked like he wore a wedding band. I saw him with a woman who wore a wedding band, too.

Presently, I am married, and I don't drink at all. I had two kids who are now growing up. I attend church every week, and I also attend a ladies bible study.
The opinions expressed by authors may not necessarily reflect the opinion of FaithWriters.com.
If you died today, are you absolutely certain that you would go to heaven? You can be right now. CLICK HERE

JOIN US at FaithWriters for Free. Grow as a Writer and Spread the Gospel.
This article has been read 204 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
04/13/24
You make some great points in this piece. You definitely wrote on topic and show being (or becoming Christian) is not easy. Remember to write out numbers (at least to ten, some experts say to a hundred) and words like second, should be written out always. The Bible is the name of a book so always should be capped when used as the holy book (I go to Bible study, but She gave me her diet bible.) You should check out how to transition from one idea to the next. There's a section on it in the message boards under Jan's Writing Basics. My heart ached for the MC. Alcohol abuse is hard to overcome, so that's a great accomplishment. I enjoyed the read from beginning to end.
Philippa Geaney
04/13/24
I enjoyed the raw honesty in your entry. As you enter more articles you will catch a rhythm in your words that will make the story flow, sweeping the reader along. Having written that, it's true some authors choose the direct approach you have used here and that may be your forever style.
As long as you ae enjoying your writing :)
Lynae Fisher
04/15/24
I appreciate that you are sharing your testimony with others. Writing stories for fun is one thing, but sharing a part of your story is another. I do think there are a few things grammatically that could be improved like spelling out numbers and such, however I do understand that sometimes grammar goes out the window when writing testimonies like that. I've had that problem myself. Maybe writing out the basics of the story and coming back to it later to reread and polish it trying not to look at your part in it would help? I still have not totally mastered this area myself. Testimonies are so hard to write perfectly.