The Official Writing Challenge
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A very vivid take on the biblical story. I could see it played out- well done!
This is really lovely. You do a nice job of painting a picture for the reader. For me personally, I'd love to see a bit less adjectives and adverbs and more dialog, thought, and body language. You have a way of pulling the reader in. I think it's a beautiful retelling of the story and really touched my heart.
10/11/19
Wonderful job in content and delivery! My heart was moved with emotions.

Well done,
Blessings~
10/12/19
This is so beautifully written. You grabbed my attention and held it throughout. Well done. Keep writing!
10/24/19
Lovely. Stirred <I>my</I> love for Jesus-- something we as writers hope to accomplish.