The Official Writing Challenge
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02/22/19
Nice job with the topic, well done.
Blessings~
02/22/19
I liked the subtlety of your piece. Bob thought he was winning, but he was really losing. So often these things are spelled out, leaving nothing for the reader, but you didn't do that to your credit.
02/23/19
You caught and held my attention and made a good point in this story. Well done. Keep writing.
02/23/19
I'm not really getting it here. I understand what you are trying to point out, but where was that last paragraph coming from, what has golf and ignoring family got to do with " keeping up with the Joneses?"
This had a good start. However, it seems a scene or two are missing that would bridge the gap between the supper scene and the concluding statement. I think this piece is worth perfecting. I hope you have fun filling out the story.
02/25/19
Good descriptions. Could picture the family etc.
02/28/19
Very accurate depiction, with no wasted words.