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This is a lovely devotion. You picked the perfect Bible verse to illustrate your message.

My only red ink is in one paragraph you used the word needed in back-to-back sentences.

I think you did a brilliant job of describing the sifting sand. I think even if I hadn't felt that sensation myself, I still would have known what it felt like because of your great description.
07/09/15
Excellent job with the topic. I loved your story and important message.

God bless~
Good job! I loved your story.
07/11/15
This is a beautifully written devotional. The illustrations you gave about the sinking sands really stood out in this piece.I enjoy going to the beach so I could imagine myself on the beach through your writings.
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This was beautifully written. I loved the comparison between the sifting sand and Jesus security - firm foundation.