The Official Writing Challenge
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05/22/14
Epic job!

God bless~
I think this is a creative way to handle the topic. I also liked your Bible verses at the end that backed up your lines. I know punctuation can be a stylistic choice in poetry, but I found myself having to reread several lines over where if you had a comma or period it would help that need for me to reread and then break the flow of the piece. Overall you did a nice job on what I considered to be a difficult topic.